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pixelatedharmonypixelatedharmony 17 Jun 2021 10:07
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Report Null

The opening paragraph is the best part but it’s still pretty good


Such is life in the Soviet Union

+ by pixelatedharmonypixelatedharmony, 17 Jun 2021 10:07
Worm that WalksWorm that Walks 13 Jun 2021 21:28
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Erysichthon
by Worm that WalksWorm that Walks, 13 Jun 2021 21:28
Descent Into The Sky by Generic3Generic3, 11 Jun 2021 21:18
Re: A safe level?
Nautilus98Nautilus98 10 Jun 2021 02:33
in discussion Writing / Drafts » A safe level?

Thanks for the crits!
I made the typo and grammar changes.
I also tried to add a hint towards a threat.

Re: A safe level? by Nautilus98Nautilus98, 10 Jun 2021 02:33

not to hot or bright

too hot

its a pleasant level

it's a

grass is constantly a nice cool temperature

constantly at a nice cool temperature

on to the grass field

onto

field, they

field; they

there is little anomalous properties

are little

impossible to settle the only equipment

settle,

Its very fishy, but what I think it needs is a bit more to indicate that not all is right there. As it stands now, there are these camps being deserted, but there is nothing pointing to what is happening, nor is there anything to theorize about who is doing it. Maybe introduce something hinting at (or misdirecting) wanderers in to believing there is some sort of entitiy there or another force. Also, did nobody try and record their experiences there? I find it hard to believe nobody set up an audio recorder or a camera to find out whats making people leave the Level in 24 hours.

Re: A safe level? by Prototype_ToasterPrototype_Toaster, 10 Jun 2021 00:13

First crit for LimArc so forgive me if I am doing this wrong

Overall, there are a lot of SPaG errors here layered over an article that I feel is not entirely up to par. The toxic fumes outside the bunker are kinda interesting but the article does not go anywhere notable with it, and the connections to Level 12 (which so far, is a favorite of mine here) would be great to elaborate on, but again, the article goes nowhere with it. The bunker boys, I feel are kind of generic and uninteresting, just some random crazy gun guys. What entities are there to kill? Were their entitites here previously and they wiped them out? Did these guys go crazy from fighting down there? This article leaves a lot to be desired, and what is present is not very interesting. -1

Re: Level 63 Draft by Prototype_ToasterPrototype_Toaster, 09 Jun 2021 23:51

I feel some similarities (probably unintentional) to SCP-3319 but I think this is good enough to stand out on its own and not be considered a ripoff. Plus I have always had a love for "dimmension connectors" like this. +1

by Prototype_ToasterPrototype_Toaster, 09 Jun 2021 23:23
Prototype_ToasterPrototype_Toaster 08 Jun 2021 03:25
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Erysichthon

RPC-886 but good

+1

by Prototype_ToasterPrototype_Toaster, 08 Jun 2021 03:25
jonononojononono 07 Jun 2021 21:08
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Cult of Finis Mortis

This article knows my username and I don't like it.

by jonononojononono, 07 Jun 2021 21:08
Cherry1Cherry1 07 Jun 2021 02:09
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Erysichthon

Neat!

+1

by Cherry1Cherry1, 07 Jun 2021 02:09

The basset fraizer index was 3/5. This was incorrect so I changed it to 2.667/5.

REMINDER: To get the correct basset fraizer index, you must add the difficulty, entity count, and chaos gradient and then divide the sum by 3. Any articles that do not follow this rule will be corrected by me.

The basste fraizer index was 4.3/5. This was incorrect so I changed it to 5/5.

REMINDER: To get the correct basset fraizer index, you must add the difficulty, entity count, and chaos gradient and then divide the sum by 3. Any articles that do not follow this rule will be corrected by me.

The basset fraizer index was 4.5/5. This was incorrect so I changed it to 3.334/5.

REMINDER: To get the correct basset fraizer index, you must add the difficulty, entity count, and chaos gradient and then divide the sum by 3. Any articles that do not follow this rule will be corrected by me.

The basset fraizer index was 2/5. This was incorrect so I changed it to 2.334/5.

REMINDER: To get the correct basset fraizer index, you must add the difficulty, entity count, and chaos gradient and then divide the sum by 3. Any articles that do not follow this rule will be corrected by me.

The basset fraizer index was 5/5. this was incorrect so I changed it to 3.667/5.

REMINDER: To get the correct basset fraizer index, you must add the difficulty, entity count, and chaos gradient and then divide the sum by 3. Any articles that do not follow this rule will be corrected by me.

The basset fraizer index was 4.5/5. This was incorrect so I changed it to 1.667/5 as well as updated the basset fraizer index description.

REMINDER: To get the correct basset fraizer index, you must add the difficulty, entity count, and chaos gradient and then divide the sum by 3. Any articles that do not follow this rule will be corrected by me.

The basset fraiser index was 0.1/5. It was in correct so I changer it to 0.667/5

REMINDER: To get the correct basset fraizer index, you must add the difficulty, entity count, and chaos gradient and then divide the sum by 3. Any articles that do not follow this rule will be corrected by me.

Worm that WalksWorm that Walks 05 Jun 2021 19:16
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Object 3

:problem:

by Worm that WalksWorm that Walks, 05 Jun 2021 19:16

Thank you very much for the line-by-line Viz!

I have added these fixes into my next draft (save for one!) and I appreciate your attention to detail.

Here:

"I think this should be Vraxus'."

There are different rulings on the apostrophe s on singular nouns but I choose to maintain the 's since I feel it correlates with the majority of references I source, and also since I have been doing so already in my other entries.

Otherwise you are spot on :swag-love:
Cheers for taking the time


Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks

ChxnceChxnce 02 Jun 2021 20:04
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Level 8

this is my favorite level so far

by ChxnceChxnce, 02 Jun 2021 20:04
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