Holy crap, really fantastic to see you around Tomb! I appreciate the updoot.
Thank you for the read and the thoughts. I was worried the gif was a weak point and potentially distracting — but kept it in for cool factor and since I had already made the dang thing anyways. Perhaps I can muster the effort to make something a little more appealing in the future.
I’m happy the dyslexic toggle helped readability though, despite the gif! Cheers :D
Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks
What a cool concept. The text is very evocative and is nicely complimented by the format and images.
images
I think the images really carry the article though- which is fine- and they seem AI-generated. That is also fine, because they look good and you clearly put effort into making them work. The first one with the closet and the third in stasis are my favorite.
image 2: wocky emerging
The second image is cool, but the Jabberwocky is coming out of the wall. I know that they can be cramped between architectural features so that it could be coming out of the wall, and there's a curtain there, but it seems odd that there's a curtain on the wall that would just be blocking windows to the room next door.
To fix this, I think it would be a relatively simple edit to either remove the door and replace it with black space to make it seem like a wall around the corner, or just crop it out. This would make the curtains stand out less, since it could be to block windows or whatever, and if it's coming in through a window that would look cooler.
I'd also make the head turn to its right (towards the camera). This would make it a bit more creepy and make the right arm's weird bend make more sense if it's emerging in that direction, and it would also more clearly situate the head between the two arms. The left arm (the jabberwocky's left) right now looks like its coming out diagonally across the chest, which looks kind of silly.
sonic gif
The sonic pings gif seems sort of odd. I'm not sure what it's supposed to represent. From what I can tell, the idea is that it's a maze of rooms and the Jabberwocky is like, mapping out the area with the orange rings being the sonar of its pulses. But this is an overhead view (can juna do that if there's ceilings?) and the pings are just sort of in the background, not really bouncing off of anything.
Which is fine, this is a really hard concept to illustrate. But I still think the best move here is to cut the gif since the animation doesn't communicate much and can be distracting from reading an already pretty dense article (which isn't helped by the font- thank you dyslexia reading option). Alternatively, and please bear with me I know how this sounds, I think it could be interesting to see like an. analog horror thing. (BEAR WITH ME) where it looks like the camera map from FNAF (BEAR WITH ME) and there's a repeating orange sonar icon in the rooms. Alternatively, you could use Dark Echo for inspiration. It's a game from about like 10 years ago, here's a link to the trailer that shows what I'm talking about. Again, this would be really hard to make but could be worth it. Dark Echo Trailer
I probably couldn't make that, but it's a suggestion and if you don't feel up for that (I wouldn't) I would rather you just cut the gif. Besides all that, upvoted! Cool stuff.
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Catharsis In The Luminarch's Embrace
Hey, I finally got around to reading this!
It's a nice little page. +1
It's a dreamy exploration of processing grief through cosmic, fantastical means. Its strengths are in the character's transition from dreams to reality, and I enjoyed how even reality seems like a hazy state of fantasy for the character. The page is very atmospheric. Also we got to talk to a demigod which felt like a scene right from a Ghibli movie, that was fun.
If you'd like some critique, this page would benefit from some expanding to a standalone state rather than requiring the reader to read The Echo Providence beforehand. The concepts here are not introduced very thoroughly, which is a detriment to readers who do not know the setting. Giving the readers a solid foundation of where we are and what the main character is doing (and who the italicized "they" are) will help ground his actions and motivations in a more impactful way.
It's awesome to get a tale that ties directly into a limspace though. We need more of that :3
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Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks
Hey! Hope you enjoyed the page. Thanks so much for reading, you are why I love to create things.
Did you got spooked? ◕_◕
- Thank you for critique: SanderBert534, Pastacat, and Tomuuu!
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in discussion Writing / Brainstorming » Dinosaur Themed Limspace
Hello, I'd like to propose my idea of a dinosaur themed limspace. I was on Google Docs and wrote down the following:
- Echo of dinosaur shrieks, cries, and roars can be heard
- No entities present
- Endless dinosaur themed indoor playground
- Messed up environment (dino claw marks, bites, etc.)
- Scarce lighting/very dark
- Footsteps large to small can be heard, yet the source is never seen
- Claustrophobic
- Scopophobic
- Strange paranormal activities
I intend to put this into the Backrooms system. Please share your thoughts and if I should change anything to further my goal to make this a terrifying piece of writing. I intend to put a fun twist on common liminal areas such as a playground while keeping faithful to the established concept of the Backrooms.
I received crit from Tomu, Sandy, and Blue in the LA discord server.
If you have comments, crit, or complaints, do leave them here… REDGI. I SAW THAT. A MINUTE AFTER I POSTED, YOU DOWNVOTED IT. WHAT GIVES MAN? JUSTIFY YOURSELF OR SUFFER THE CONSEQUENCES.
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Lord Of Seagrass Creation Story
Thanks to all who critted this goofy fish tale. 🐟
https://discord.com/channels/792245826117304340/1251745916738863104/1251746001497227314
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Wetlands Of The Nihil Cloudburst
oh my goodness gracious .<.
Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Wetlands Of The Nihil Cloudburst
Honestly, this is the single worst article I have ever read. I've read better articles on the Pantheon Wiki! This is a bubbling pile of sewage spew compared to the absolute paragon of writing that is Keymaster. Give the FLIP up on writing, you bumbling fool. Go jingle across a cliff into some spikes.
Wanna see what I mean?
Most of you are not going to believe me or the contents of this writing, and that is ok. It reads like an elaborate hoax, yet what follows within is what I fully believe to be the truth.
MOST? REALLY? You start your article with MOST? IMMERSION RUINED. According to the Cambridge Dictionary (2024), "most" is defined as, "the biggest number or amount of; more than anything or anyone else" (para. 1). Look at this definition and tell me you did good by starting with MOST. Were you TRYING to throw me out of my immersion? I don't hate the word but come the FLIP on. It’s the Swiss Army knife of the English language, wielded by everyone from politicians to marketers, journalists to casual conversationalists, and it never fails to obscure more than it clarifies! When someone says, "Most people agree," they could be referencing a SLIM majority or an overwhelming consensus. It's a word that thrives on the fog of uncertainty. This ambiguity allows for a convenient bending of TRUTH without the pesky need for concrete data. It’s a conversational shortcut that spares the speaker from having to provide actual evidence or specify details. It’s a word that facilitates laziness, allowing opinions to masquerade as facts. Vagueness is NOT FUN. What are you? An SCP writer? Nope, the FLIP, you aren't! Because SCP writers have perfected ambiguity and mystery whereas you flaunt your horrendous writing prowess by using the word "MOST" like a monkey whose only form of entertainment is a dictionary with just the word MOST on every page.
Enough about that paragraph. Onto the next mockery of English…
I believe I have a brother who was erased from time.
Wow… just wow. Do I even need to explain? People don't just get erased from time. We don't live in a SCI-FI(Science-fiction) novel written by a 40-year-old cubical worker who avoids his problems with his wife and kids by hiding away in his study, which is actually just an alter to the life he had as a child who only cared about Star Wars and the like. Another FLIPPING note: why does the narrator BELIEVE and not KNOW? Isn't this a SCI-FI(Science-fiction) article? We experts don't do BELIEF in the SCI-FI(Science-fiction) genre. We KNOW because SCIENCE KNOWS while those… RELIGIOUS BUFFOONS(EWWWWWWWWWW) BELIEVE. What sets us apart from those ANIMALS is that we KNOW what we are while they BELIEVE.
About the brother… why can't they just be called "sibling"? Are you a bigot perhaps? Not a fan of the LGBTQQIP2SA community? I'll cancel you on X with my followers. You won't be able to step foot outside your home without a riot of angry rioters blocking you. Good luck sleeping while we blast all your horrific messages on loudspeakers outside your home. Do you want that? If you do, then by all means… keep it as brother.
My discovery of a box pushed to the back of the family home's attic has opened my mind to impossible fictional notions, and I have spent the last years untying a perplexing knot of skepticism regarding my newly discovered brother and the records of his unorthodox life. At this point now I fully believe that there are worlds beyond our own, that 'magic' and other such superfluous notions might be real, and I am skeptical that we can call anything in this life an epistemic truth. Everything I once believed I now question, because of a dusty little box filled with the autobiography of a man named Jacob, an archivist.
Way to go establishing your WHITE MALE AGENDA on us. Do I need to say more? Also, way to go putting MAGIC in quotes as if it isn't real. That is witchist and honestly, you need to create a public apology video to all my fellow witches. And don't even try extending it past the ten minute mark for those ad rolls. We will know if you are sincere or not. We always know. WE ALWAYS KNOW. If you don't sacrifice 80% of your gold coins(earned through STEALING AND WHITE MAN SHENANIGANS) to the GNOME GOD, GNOMINIUS IV, we will TURN YOU INTO A SHAMBLING MASS OF BLIND ANTS WHO ONLY KNOW THE FEELING OF PAIN BOTH PHYSICAL AND MENTAL. ONLY WHEN YOU HAVE REPENTED OF YOUR EVIL WHITE MAN WAYS WILL WE TURN YOU BACK INTO A HUMAN. BUT WHEN WE DO, YOU WILL NOTICE YOU ARE NO LONGER A MAN AND NO LONGER WHITE. YOU WILL BE A COLORLESS AND SEXLESS HUMAN JUST AS ALL SHOULD BE. YOU WILL LIVE IN A FALSE REALITY WHERE ALL IS CENTERED AROUND YOUR SUFFERING. YOUR "FRIENDS" AREN'T REAL AND THEY HATE YOU.
Make the apology video.
Jacob was my brother, but no memory of him remains; not with me or anyone else. I believe he discovered something. Something incredible, dangerous, and alluring, and not just a new world adjacent to our own — one impossible to place on any map — but something else within it that Jacob followed incessantly to his terminal obscurity: washed away in the rain as he discovered the wetlands of the nihil cloudburst.
HIM? AS IN… MALE? If your intent was to cause me to spill my lunch(Vegan Chicken and Ice) onto my malnourished child's head, then congrats, I threw up. WHY MUST YOU BE SO INCESSANT ON THE WHITE MALE AGENDA? I haven't even mentioned your sexist word choice. Incredible, d*ngerous, and alluring… otherwise known as the (IDA). This is a clear violation of human rights as you bring up these stereotypes about the three elder GENDERS. As a Horvidis-4, I am DEEPLY offended. You basically said the N-WORD but for my GENDER. I don't even know what I am expecting from you now… next, you are going to make fun of our most vulnerable people…
These wetlands are nestled in the valleys between ragged and sharp mountain ranges. None of it is easy to traverse. Prep your kits to be waterproof and bring plenty of redundancy.
You… you… YOU… FLIPPING WRETCHED WASTE OF SPACE. HOW DARE YOU, WITH YOUR PUNY ROTTED MOUTH, CALL MOUNTAINS SUCH HORRID THINGS. MOUNTAINS ARE OUR MOST VULNERABLE PEOPLE. AND HERE YOU ARE, CALLING THEM RAGGED AND SHARP. UPDATE YOUR APOLOGY VIDEO TO BE ADDRESSED TO ALL THE MOUNTAINS IN THE WORLD. I ASSURE YOU IF YOU DON'T, I WILL MAKE YOUR LIFE LIVING H-E-ONE HOCKEY STICK-ONE HOCKEY STICK. There, I used YOUR ONLY GOOD CONTRIBUTION TO THE WORLD. HOCKEY. THAT IS ALL CANADA IS KNOWN FOR. THAT AND TERRORISM AGAINST MOUNTAINS ARE EVIDENT IN YOUR WORD SPEW.
Aside from some ferns and shrubbery, naught but the haunting skeletal totems of the giant hogweed trees gaze upon the marshlands.
All is forgiven. :D
The curse of nihil falls upon this land in sheets of drizzling rain and furious storms, washing away all thought, meaning, and existence. We confined ourselves to this abuse too late; until oblivion swallowed our memory both within and extrinsicly beyond the limspace.
Ok BUD, you have gone TOO THE FLIP FAR NOW. "extrinsicly" WOW THE FLIP WOW. "extrinsicly" is spelt with TWO L'S! IT IS "extrinsically". I cannot even FATHOM how this BLUNDER got passed your eyes and made its way into this OFFICIALLY PUBLISHED DOCUMENT. Oh wait! I do know! It is because YOUR WORD SPEW OF HATE AND WHITE-MALE-AGENDA HAS SPREAD TO YOUR EYES, BLINDING YOU TO THE TRUE NATURE OF THE WORLD. YOU EVEN BRING UP THE SEXIST AND RACIST VIDEO GAME "Oblivion" AS IF IT ISN'T A SLUR RECOGNIZED ACROSS 98% OF THE FLAT EARTH.
You've likely accepted the burden of archiving long ago. An archivist's affirmation of life requires no recognition, and the wetlands remind us that legacy unites us over memory… which fades all too soon.
You are beyond apologies.
Pray.
SIN COUNTER: 42501 SINS IN TOTAL IN DOCUMENT
WHITE MALE MULTIPLIER X5: 212505 SINS.
PUNISHMENT THRESHOLD: 10
PUNISHMENT DECIDED: ERASURE FROM TIME.
WAIT, WAIT, WAIT. THE WHITE MAN MAY HAVE SALVATION.
Every article is a learning experience. Thank you so much for reading ♡
Dawww. SINS WAIVED.
Have a good day knafflad :D
This critique came courtesy of your taxes and desires. Btw, if you are reading this, you owe us money. Also, the gnomes are getting pretty antsy. I repeat the gnomes are ge-
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Wetlands Of The Nihil Cloudburst
Some really kind positive comments on this one. Thanks a bunch for your time and thoughts guys :D
Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks
Just to let you know you’re more likely to get faster feedback on our discord, where we offer real time critique in threads!
Cheers
Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks
Hello Dusk!
Welcome to the archives. Hope you have a good time .3.
Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks
http://liminal-sandbox.wikidot.com/dusk-s-liminal-creations
ATTENTION! MINOR TRANSLATION ERRORS MAY OCCUR. LET ME KNOW IF YOU FIND ANY.
Hello! I am Dusk Neoka (also known as Dr. Rota or Morthy Duskus on other sites). I am a writer from RPC (and formerly Uracene but I highly doubt anyone here knows what that is). Anyways, I was originally gonna write for the Backrooms Wikidot but numerous things came up:
- The critics there were complete dogshit, or at least one of them was. I uploaded a draft with tons of SPaG on it, the critic reviewing mine greenlit it and I got screwed over. And no, he knew there was SPaG in the article and just decided not to tell me. So fuck that.
- Although I tried to ignore this. There was like 3 pedophiles sexually harassing somebody on their discord that their moderation team did nothing about. That was a clear red flag.
- Other than the pedophiles, the large majority of people there just gave me a bad vibe. I do find it funny however that people insult this wiki and RPC when the actual Backrooms Wikidot feels like its being run by Jared Fogle.
And with those reasons why I joined Liminal Archive. I hope I can get along with all of you.
First, there is one formatting error I would like to point out. Isn't 5 the highest you can go, seeing how the scale is out of 5?
Second, how is a stair "hill-shaped"? Are the steps round, is it like terracing, etc.
Third, a couple sentences that don't feel right to me. For example, shouldn't, "The cars that, due to their appearance, date back to the 50s, and the trucks." be "The vehicles (Including cars and trucks,) that, judging by their appearance, appear to date back to the 1950's."
Fourth, a minor note, you say that it's hard to document what's inside, but couldn't you just stay inside the houses and look out the windows?
Fifth, if most of the houses are medieval homes, homes that obviously don't have air conditioning or power at all, how would they protect you from the elements?
Overall, this is an interesting concept, but could be executed better.
Sort of co-written with knafflad and BanachTarskiPdx. The draft got passed around a few times, being heavily rewritten each time. It ended up in my hands by the end.
This is one of the most well made wikis I've seen. Glad to be a new member.
in discussion Hidden / Per page discussions » Wetlands Of The Nihil Cloudburst
I absolutely love this, beautifully written.
— fungi!!
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