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This is one of those rare limspaces that capture the gentle wonder of an undiscovered world. I would rest here for sure. Thanks for the page, I really like this one.
Knafflad - Ohmeghon - Nostworks
This is a stellar article, glad that my critique was taken into consideration. Especially the driver getting a better description and the limspace classification getting an improvement in tone. Overall great article, conjures a very vivid and interesting image and definetly nails the tranquil feeling of going home after a long jorney.
There are a couple mild grammatical errors and a single term use i'm iffy about.
1. "the Rainy Refuge sits, hardly unchanging" means the polar opposite of what you are trying to say, it should either be "hardly changing" or just "unchanging".
2. "No matter No matter who waits", "No matter" reapeated on accident.
3. "the limspace possesses untold trillions of faint and fragile connections to other spaces throughout the universe." shouldn't it be Interspace instead of universe?
4. "the Infinitum Wonderers." unsure of wether or not it's intenional, but the correct spelling is "Wanderers"
I'm SandyBox354 by the way, if it wasn't obvious.
Ah yes. Thanks for the extra crit. Those were mistakes in editing.
Except number 4. It is Infinitum Wonderers. They wonder forever. They actually don't do much wandering!
Glad I could help! I wonder, are there any plans regarding the "Plastic Paradise" and the Infinitum Wonderers getting some articles about themselves specifically?
Oh but of course. PP is already written. Just not crit.
Good to know. Haven't seen PP in the draft channel, has it already been posted or is it currently getting some touch-ups by you?
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