Collabconknaff X Twahllii / Discussion

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Neutral for now

ImKak! 28 Aug 2021 16:11

Ey, this could easily get a +1 from me if just a tiny handful of mistakes are fixed :swag_love:

▼ Tiny Little Fixes

contstruction

Needs no explaining

Glitches rarely happen

? You never explained what are these glitches

Low-end estimates suggest a few thousand —- Rarely does the complex boast over 150 residents at any time.

So why is this estimation so high, makes absolutely no sense. Yeah I know the entity stuff and all but why did they estimate it so inaccurately if they know the real number

Feodosijovych

Sounds like someone mashed their head on the keyboard. I mean, I appreciate giving nations recognization, I believe this is Russian, but please put another surname, this is confusing to some readers

You've made it to Level 13, add your name. Leave your mark.

So random lol, was there something that you guys forgot to add here? Or am I just being dumb?

Yeah that's about it, good job knaff and twhalliii, solid article and good job, can't wait to give this an upvote and see it in the wiki, big love, kak

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Almarduk 28 Aug 2021 22:29

Pretty solid worldbuilding, but it's left me wanting some more.

The setting is rather strong in how it sets a post-collapse zombie story dynamic among its population, and it's one of the rare cases where I want to hear more about the faction politicking. I want to get a good idea of how this place is organized, what is the culture in there, which are the ghettos and where're the untouchably rich — more human detail, if you will. It lends itself to a lot of exploration of the human condition without having to squeeze a stone.

From this mindset, I feel like the end result is somewhat disappointing. It's not bad by any means but it doesn't come close to what it could be. Although maybe the kind of worldbuilding that I want is far easier in tales than articles.

I'll be voting neutral on this one.

The Dark Destroyer 30 Aug 2021 23:19

I can't upvote in good faith till this gets another round of editing.

It doesn't bode well when you mispell quantum as quantam within the level classification table, the first thing that people read and the first thing that should be fixed in crit.

That aside, it's pretty interesting honestly. I feel like this could be a pretty nice example of a backrooms level with a little more polish.

I'm no voting on principle till this gets some more editing

knafflad 01 Sep 2021 05:52

Thanks for the comments!

Indeed this one came out the gate rather unpolished.

I don't want to implement your crit fixes until after the winners are declared, as I feel the entry should be judged "as is" for how we submitted it! Great feedback and understandable no-votes.

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DrainedWell 04 Sep 2021 22:47

glitches

Cmon knaff

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