To enter The Home, make your way through the dilapidated remnants of the building surrounding to the bathroom
I would change "the building surrounding" to "the surrounding building". Would be clearer.
no longer cluttered and in disrepair, now clean and shiny, the air smells of soap and milk
Nitpick but to be grammatically correct, "smells" should be changed to "smelling". If it's an intentional thing then don't worry about it.
around you, in the tub, appear colorful toys of coral and fishes.
This sentence is kinda clunky. Suggested rewrite: "Around you are colorful toys of coral and fishes floating at the water's surface."
speaking loud-loud to one another
This is a great line.
writing things you can't understand down
This is a little confusing. I'd change it to "writing things down you can't understand", or just remove "down" entirely.
Living room
Maybe capitalize "room" in the tab text
The following page has been cleared of tampering. Fixes will be highlighted in blue.
Honestly the blinking here is kinda distracting.
Fatalities are almost impossible unless it is the intent so long as you are careful not to be trapped.
This line is a little clunky. I think it could be smoother.
and a line of a white substance can be seen on the sofa.
I think this imagery could be a bit stronger. Instead you could say something like "the sofa is marked with a white substance in a thin streak."
Footnotes
1. Head must be fully submerged.
Is it intentional that the footnotes are visible here? Seems a little weird.
Overall I really love this article. The imagery and emotion is so strong despite the short length. Can't wait to upvote it.