I know I was involved in writing it but after so long of waiting for someone else to give this crit I'm just going to do it myself.
It is only comprised of residential structures
change that to "solely comprised"
The level is typically quiet, you will only hear the chirping of crickets and the occasional pitter-patter of carpet fluid dripping from above.
The level is typically quiet, the silence is only broken by the chirping of crickets and the occasional pitter-patter of carpet fluid dripping from above.
Black metallic pipes stretch across the cogwell matrix, these pipes contain carpet fluid and will occasionally burst open and rain down on the houses below.
Black metallic pipes stretch across the cogwell matrix, containing carpet fluid and occasionally bursting open to rain down on the houses below.
This section of Level 11 will rain down carpet fluid, which has been turned acidic by the sulfuric smoke, more frequently than other areas of Level 11.
This section of Level 11 will rain down carpet fluid more frequently than other areas of Level 11, made far more dangerous by the acidity it picks up from the sulfuric smoke.
Once you enter their territory, they will offer you a position at their factories and will pay you in rations.
Once you enter their territory, they will offer you a position at their factories in exchange for a steady supply of rations. Most wanderers, starving at this point, are forced to accept.
Attempting to traverse this barrier is considered pointless as it only leads to more houses.
Attempting to traverse this barrier is considered pointless, as it continues indefinitely.