The Boundary (limspace)
The Boundary (limspace)
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Summary:
Rewrite of level false reality by u/lifehacksandpranks0, at the request of Mr. Zero
I think you should break up the paragraphs into multiple paragraphs where it feels natural.
My main concern with this article is that the idea of existing between two states at once is something that would apply to many many spaces. I think there needs to be something more specific about this limspace with how it is accessed or functions, otherwise beginning the article with how it's accessed would seem repetitive with other articles. Maybe you can only enter this specific borderline state under certain specific conditions, like during sleep paralysis. That's just one idea though.
The Boundary is a borderline state of simultaneous existence in both limspace and baseline reality.
This confused me for a lot of the article because it seemed like this applies to other limspaces. The Boundary isn't just the state of existence, it is also the limspace itself. So this should read something like: "The Boundary is a space one can enter through a borderline state of simultaneous existence between the space and Baseline."
I don't think you should say "baseline reality". I prefer just "Baseline" and always capitalized. I also prefer to say "space" instead of "limspace" most of the time but that's personal preference and there's places you definitely should always use limspace.
wanderers in this limspace have been known to stop drinking almond water and risk becoming insanities to prolong the effect as long as possible.
If we are still using almond water, I think that it should only work in the backrooms, so limspaces wouldn't involve it. I would remove this line or replace the almond water mention with something more general. Maybe you could come up with something for it or brainstorm on the discord.
The connection to the baseline reality is extremely tenuous, and is broken if the wanderer is seen by anyone from the baseline reality, or anyone from the baseline reality hears their voice.
It shouldn't be "the baseline reality". get rid of the "the"s.
When the connection is severed wanderers are left in the liminal side of the space, an empty, pitch-black void filled with demons.
This feels like missed opportunity. I think that you should never be able to reach the other side, as the whole premise of this article is about being halfway between. So the aspect of seeing the limspace as a distorted mix with baseline is something unique to touch on.
You could have it be more than just a black void. It could be a whole world in there, but you only get to see parts of it. Imagine being inside your home, and halfway across the room is a bell-tower rising out of opaque greenish fog.
It could be kinda like when you go cross-eyed and the two images from your eyes don't align, so it looks like two separate scenes crammed together and your brain tries to merge them in bizarre ways. To tie into what I said earlier about coming up with a more specific way to enter the reality, you could have it be going cross-eyed during a sleep paralysis episode or during something else. Instead of the normal cross-eye vision, one of your eyes sees into the limspace, and your body now exists within both simultaneously.
The location of the baseline reality that a wanderer is sent to upon entry into The Boundary will always be in close proximity to friends or family, if the wanderer has any. If the wanderer has no friends or living relatives in the baseline reality, they will be sent to a location of special meaning to them, usually their home.
This is really confusing to me. Is this saying that when you enter the Boundary, you are also teleported to somewhere else in baseline? You didn't mention that before and I think it's a really weird and needless part.
Because the connection is severed upon being noticed by anyone from the baseline reality, wanderers in this limspace are forced to hide from everyone, including their family, to stay in it as long as possible.
This is an interesting bit. You could throw in a line about people hiding themselves in attics and closets so that no one finds them while they are exploring. It could also act as a sort of return system, where you keep a fellow Archivist with you around a corner, and if you get in danger you signal them to turn and look at you so that you exit the limspace.
Humans have always imagined their lost loved ones were reaching out to them from the other side. Tales of ghosts date back to the beginning of recorded history. Numerous cultures believe their ancestors are watching out for them, and many have been known to leave offerings of food for them to consume. While the dead are not reaching out to us as far as we know, those trapped in The Boundary certainly are.
This intro feels too long and unrelated. It makes things confusing because it seems to change topics without an explanation for how it's related to anything.
Forced to live like ghosts, they hide from their own families just to stay with them, for to be seen is to be banished back to the hell from which they came. Their presence is known only by the creaking you hear in the middle of the night, the feeling of being watched, and the strange conviction of some children that there is something beneath their bed. Something moves in the corner of your eye, but when you look there is no one there. Items are not where you left them, and sometimes you think you hear a voice calling out to you, that cuts off before you can be sure you even heard it at all. Hiding from the world we so desperately want to return to, staying hidden from the ones we need to talk to again, this is the life of a ghost, one banished to this living hell. To my wife and children, I miss you.
This is very confusing to me. I thought these were normal people existing between both spaces. I don't think you ever mention in the article that they become ghost-like entities with these powers that allow them to remain hidden. I'm not sure I like that angle either. I think the article would be a lot more interesting if it was about wanderers WANTING to see what's in this limspace, and having to stay hidden so they don't get pulled back to baseline, rather than so they don't get pulled into the void. This ghost journal doesn't really do it for me, and I think some journals from Archivists trying to explore the limspace could be much better instead.
About the entrances and exits, they'd obviously be changed if you go with my suggestions. And honestly I don't think that section is needed for this limspace, as it should say near the beginning of the description how you enter and exit it.
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